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![]() ![]() 'there's the dungeon core! if we get that, we can control the dungeon,' Rugrat said. the dungeon core glowed, pouring mana into the dungeon. the tendrils flew forward and the power exploded." "the dungeon boss stood up out of its chair. red tendrils of power twisted around her arm. Ice coated the mounts' wings and they fell from the sky." "she drew in power to her body. a big spell scroll went off in the sky, filling the sky with ice. Some sections read like this: "the enemy flew up into the sky. ![]() the language is unbelievably simple and repetitive. did an editor even read it? i've gotten through the first three and they all have similar issues but book four is really rough. This series has so much potential but it feels like a first draft. ![]()
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